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         vision tinted red
staring through bangs and lashes
        wondering how far…
Another one.
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SineFundamenta's avatar
That's awesome. I don't even really like haiku, but I like this.

It's the ambiguity. You wonder about the red, then the bangs and lashes obscuring whatever is being stared at through them so the subject of the poem is getting an unclear perception just like the reader, and then the last line...how far to what? Or from what? Or lots of other possible meanings...

I love that :)